"Becoming Madame Mao" by Anchee Min
In the beginning of the passage there is a lack of punctuation. "You need to have the lotus feet my mother cries." To me it seems like the mother is in a panic about about the child's feet bindings but there isn't an exclamation point there so I don't feel the emotion behind it. The passage also switches from past to present and from first to third person. It's somewhat confusing because there is no indication of when the setting will change. This passage also describes her abusive father. The author uses descriptive language so I can clearly picture him but when describing the beatings he gives the child and her mother there is a lack of details.
In the beginning of the passage there is a lack of punctuation. "You need to have the lotus feet my mother cries." To me it seems like the mother is in a panic about about the child's feet bindings but there isn't an exclamation point there so I don't feel the emotion behind it. The passage also switches from past to present and from first to third person. It's somewhat confusing because there is no indication of when the setting will change. This passage also describes her abusive father. The author uses descriptive language so I can clearly picture him but when describing the beatings he gives the child and her mother there is a lack of details.